HI @grlucas,
Do you mind taking a look at my draft?
I know it is a weird topic to write on, but I love crocodiles and thought this would be a great way to explain a movie I love better than the original article.
Can you tell me what you think or if I need to change my approach?
Some of this is good; some small errors, including some biased language, needs to be attended to. Why don’t you combine it with the current article on the film? I think it would flesh out that article a bit. Avoid too much plot summary. 
My plan is to combine my draft with the existing article. I felt the plot summary was a little long winded, I will trim it. I will also attend to those errors and get it moved over today. Thank you.
Sounds good. Let me know if you need any assistance.
HI again @grlucas. I have moved over all of my sandbox content to the article and fixed the persuasive language and other grammar issues.
I have a few errors at the bottom of the page and I’m trying to figure out to solve them. Once I have, I will post the article for your review in the main forum like I see my classmates doing.